would you read this book? im writing it PLEASE advice URGENT! omg i just need some help?

Question

here's the basic plot

cammie is 12 and happy as she can be. then one day a new boy moves into her school named Quinn. she and Quinn get to be best friends and then they fall in love. but in the middle of the book Quinns father and mother get knifed dead in a hostage standoff at a bank and his two little sisters run away and are later found dead. so then Quinn moves in with cammie. but cammie's mother is mean and evil and decides to kick them out. Cammie is so upset that she decides to kill herself so she does. then at the end of the book Quinn kills cammies mother an dburns down their house and hangs himself

ok how is it so far? its based on real life. i just need details to go in between the main events. the story is probably going to be 150-200 pgs long i just need some help getting started. the genre is be going to mostly be teen fiction.

Answer 1

But as it turns out Quinns parents left him a sizable inheritance and he proposes Cammie to run away with him and they get married in some tropical island getaway. Soon afterwards

Cammie finds out that her mean mother is not her real mother and finds out who her real parents were. None other than Quinn's parents. So as it turns out Quinn and Cammie are not only breaking the law by getting marrried at a young age but they are also brother and sister. Yes!!!!

Answer 2

WTF? umm i dont mean to be mean... but i would toss this over my shoulder. Maybe just stick with his parents getting killed... he goes through hard times and cammie helps him through it. Cammie has some troubles in her family and so Cammie and Quinn leave and just drive. They help each other on their way to a new town, with a new beginning. Quinn helps Cammie become stronger and forget her path. She helps quinn foreget. Maybe a twist, Cammie's Crazy dad comes after her and Cammie and Quinn keep having to go to next town to try to hide from him?



Your story you have now is umm... kinda disturbing and gross. No affence!

Answer 3

I wonder if I'm the evil grandmother, sounds alot like my granddaughter. I think it's a good plot maybe a little unbelievable keep with it you'll write a best seller someday.

Answer 4

No offense but no. Not my type